Story Beats, yet again

Here's the new story beats, updated to reflect the forest setting which people seemed to like.

-Camera fades up from black to a sign that reads: "Private Property, No Trespassing."
-In the distance, Billy is seen carrying a box.
-Closeup of the box being dumped onto a stone ledge. Box reads "This side up, fragile, do not drop."
-Camera shows Billy's face for the first time, he is a bit tired from carrying the box.
-Billy opens the box and takes out the manual.
-The first page reads "Thank you for purchasing the PRO-QUEST™ Instant Dragon Kit. We hope you enjoy ... (scribbling for the rest of the page)"
-On the opposite page is a picture showing a picture of a knight on the back of a dragon. Billy's hand touches this picture.
-Billy smiles.
-Billy flips the page and the third page reads: "Step one, find a well," and shows a picture of an old well.
-Billy looks up. Shot starts as a closeup on Billy's face and pulls back to reveal that he is in fact standing over a large, stone well. This is the main establishing shot for the environment and shows the well, surrounding forest, and a telephone pole with a pale, overhead light.
-Billy turns the page, which starts listing ingredients. Billy starts adding ingredients to the well.
-Montage sequence of Billy adding ingredients, Billy turning pages in the book, and the well bubbling and glowing different colors
-Billy gets to the second to last page in the book, which reads: "Final ingredient: WARNING, be sure to use no more than a couple drops."
-Billy carefully takes out the final ingredient, a vial of glowing pink fluid, and uncorks it.
-Suddenly, the overhead pole light flickers, and Billy looks up nervously.
-With the camera tightly framed on Billy's face, Billy adds a single drop of the final ingredient into the well.
-A shot of the well shows that nothing has happened except for a tiny ripple from the drop.
-Slightly frustrated, Billy adds in a few more drops. Again nothing happens.
-Billy pounds the side of the vat, and the vial of ingredient slips off the side of the well and into the liquid. The light above goes completely black, leaving Billy illuminated only by the glow of the well.
-Billy makes a scared face.
-The camera follows the liquid into the well beneath the liquid.
-As the vial sinks to the bottom, viscous pink liquid flows out of the bottle and starts forming into a dragon embryo. Camera slowly closes in on the embryo's eye as it forms.
-Cutting back above the well, the liquid is now bubbling furiously. A dragon bursts out of the liquid and rises into the air, roaring and breathing licks of flame.
-Billy looks on in wonder, with the dragon's shape reflecting in his eyes.
-The lights suddenly click on, and the dragon makes a startled face, as if suddenly realizing something.
-The next shot shows Billy and the dragon in frame. The dragon is very tiny.
-Billy looks on in wonder as the dragon lands on the edge of the well, kind of upset that he's so small.
-Billy's surprised expression slowly turns into a smile, and he puts the dragon on his shoulder. The manual's last page shows the same picture of the knight on the dragon, and the caption "Enjoy your new mighty dragon!"
-Billy walks over to the picture and touches the dragon's face, slightly disappointed.
-The dragon makes an angry face, and breathes a huge roar of flame that instantly reduces the manual to ash.
-Billy is totally surprised, but then gets a mischievous face, which the dragon mimics.
-Billy leaves with the dragon, camera ends on the discarded ingredient bottles and the open box, the well, and the smoking ash on the well.